I have been learning to put more vocab into the readers head and hook them in to make them want to read more. I used some fantastic vocab in my writing. strolled narrow winding charging terrified dozily. Next time my challenge is to put in some similes. It is kind of like as I sprinted off as fast as a cheetah.
Animal
I woke up on a fine summer's morning and started getting ready to go to school. As I opened my wardrobe I found a winding, narrow pathway leading to a magical snowy land of ice. As I slowly strolled down the path towards the icy land a huge white creature started to chase me. I yelled “Someone help me! Quick! I am in danger!” Because I was too busy trying to run away from the creature, and I wasn't looking where I was going, I whacked my head on a tree trunk. BANG! I was knocked out cold.It took me about 4 minutes to wake then I started to realise that I had been carried off in to a cold cave. The giant paw of the creature was on my chest and it was fast asleep. As gently as I could I slowly moved the paw off the animal and tiptoed out of the cave. Suddenly he woke up and I started to freak out. Oh no I don’t know what I am going to do”.So I just thought I will run. Finally I had lost the creature. I was so relieved to lose him. Suddenly I started to hear footsteps
on the ground.Thump tump the footsteps thumped louder on the ground. Just then a huge group of animals came charging in I was so terrified I nearly weed my pants.Suddenly Bang bang could that be the sound of a gun.
I ran for my life.As I Sprinted off all I could hear was bang bang It sounded like they were getting closer.Just then everything went silent. Bang bang right into my leg as I fell to the ground.I was thinking this might be the end of my life as I dozily closed my eyes.
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